I want to show you guys two examples of how you have you know school like Harvard Business School nowhere in there sa question do they say tell me about your leadership accomplishments right so as you see the questions from this past cycle they asked as we review your application what more would you like on signal as we consider your candidacy for the Harvard Business School and being a program right so what more tell us something else you know what should be considered very open-ended and I’ve seen applicants you know handle this really a variety of ways some people have done it unsuccessfully where they just sort of you know restate information that admissions people can see in different parts of the application.

This is an essay that is asking us you know asking applicants to understand to tell the story of your life you know tell us about who you are and somewhere in that story make sure you tell us about who you are as a leader because we that’s part of what we care about without you necessarily saying let me tell you about Who I am as a leader you know so we had a client for example let’s call him John who was reapplying to Harvard Business School and one of the things that John did successfully this time around was he talked about his family background like who his family was and where they came from and the roots and like the incredible diversity in terms of just diversity of different levels not just in the traditional sense and how it really helped to shape who he is as a person and how that really propelled him to start an organization to bring students together on his um university at his university and what you know how Val created value and what he learned and what he enjoyed about that experience that was his his Harvard essay and nothing was different he didn’t retake his GMAT he didn’t you know his GPA didn’t change his work story didn’t change fundamentally.

But guess what the branding and the emphasis changed right and he was able to pull out elements that really showcases you know his international mindset his collaborative you know um just celebration of diverse points of view and things like that you know and that’s what made him you know to come across in a very authentic a genuine way and he was able to apply in he applied a year ago you know and he applied to four schools I believe they were Harvard Stanford Wharton and MIT and then this time around he applied to the same exact schools which is quite risky in my opinion but you know he does what he wanted to do and he didn’t get into Stanford when he got into MIT Wharton and Harvard you know and so again I just wanna you know encourage you guys to when you have these open-ended questions.

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Something that you really want to pay attention to really think about before you even start writing your essay and maybe even if you can’t think of the significance right away maybe even after you write your first draft maybe you’re finding your significance so again that’s something that you know writing is also a process of discovery trying to figure out you know something about ourselves so maybe the significance comes later after you so what do you want the reader to walk away you know from the story with what do you want them to get a sense of because we read literature and we read these different essays to to learn something about other people but also about ourselves so kind of what do you what do you kind of want people to get out of this story knowing more about kind of you know thinking about that can help you shape and write your essay. Find out more about significance in essay at Edusson.

So when we’re thinking about organizing the literacy narrative there are many different ways we can do this and here’s a little graph taking from our book that kind of shows shows different ways that you can try do it you can do it chronologically beginning to end and you can see here the different ways you know that you can do it introducing the story describing the setting and people tell what happened say how the store was resolved and they said then say something about the significance now you can do that and sometimes that’s exactly what you want to do but sometimes you might want to do something a little different to kind of make it more interesting and engaging because some of the best some of the best essays are told in a different way so you can begin in the middle you can begin at the end and all sorts of different variations of that thinking about where you want to start maybe you maybe you want to start at the end like I had a student who started her story about I couldn’t believe you know this was the day I was graduating you know I was getting my GED I hadn’t been in school.

And so long and I finally you know took the test and I and I got my GED and from that point we then learned more throughout the story as a progressed so kind of started at the end and then told us a story about you know why she had to take her GED why she didn’t graduate from high school and those sort of things and through that we kind of heard a really interesting story because it was told like okay we start from the end and we go to the beginning you know different ways like that so just thinking about where you want to start and end the story it can can shape your essay you know many different ways and can help help you do that so now I want to talk about SH structuring in general not just literacy narratives so this can help you with all your essays and and different different assignments that we’re doing.

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Let’s just look at it I’ve got my opening sentence here and then I’m going to give my reason here then I’m going to give my example and then I’m going to conclude so let me read this to you despite the inevitability of human labor replacement some people don’t think that computers will ever reach certain levels of intellect and consciousness to rival humans in some jobs reason these people are unaware of the rate at which computers are becoming intelligent example it is just a matter of time before computers can program themselves concluding sentence even the most complex human jobs such as medicine in education will be mechanized it’s the exact same structure as paragraph 1 but what i’ve done here is i’ve i’ve mentioned side 2 some people believe that some jobs will be safe from robots.

Now I want to conclude this paragraph as a result of this exponential growth there is no reason why computers won’t eventually replace humans in all jobs you can see that this first sentence links to the next sentence links to the sorry first sentence links to the reason which links to the example which links essay help nz to the concluding sentence and you can see that this concluding sentence links back to that first sentence so what we’re doing is we’re creating a big spiral of logic logical spiral that goes around and around and around that I can tell you that the Pte algorithm the computer of the PT loves these cycles these logical cycles because that’s how it knows that your written discourse is high because it sees that that first sentence leads the 2nd to the 3rd to the 4th and it sees that that fourth one links back to the first one when I say II to languages crack the code on the PT I mean it.

Right good so whoops let me go back my paragraph one looks like this at some point in the near future artificial intelligence will supersede human intelligence and outperform us on every possible task machines are becoming increasingly intelligent at an extremely rapid pace every few years for example computer capacity doubles in power as a result of this exponential growth there is no reason why computers won’t eventually replace humans in all jobs and you can see that this is absolutely linked to the question prompt from the beginning.

I am NOT riding off topic I’m sticking to the topic tick-tick-tick we got 10 minutes left it took me Phenix to write that paragraph now I’m going to write paragraph two and what I do is I use the exact same structure as paragraph 1 except the only difference is I’m going to restate side to that some people believe that some jobs that robots will be incapable of doing some jobs give a reason give an example and I conclude side to let me show you what the whole thing looks like here my paragraph – so before I do that.


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Innocent Darkness by Suzanne Lazear (Aether Chronicles)

Publisher: Flux

Release date: August 8, 2012

Pages: 406

Summary: Noli fixed up an old flying car and took it for a joy ride with her best friend, V. Unfortunately, they are pulled over, and Noli’s punishment is to attend reform school in San Francisco. The school is absolutely terrible, complete with an evil headmistress. Noli will do anything to get away—even take a faery huntsman up on an offer that may cost her life.

I decided to write my essay about this fabulous book: Though Innocent Darkness is set in a steampunk alternate history, I felt that Suzanne Lazear’s voice was a bit too anachronistic. I found myself forgetting that Noli was supposed to come from the early 1900’s because of Lazear’s writing style. Innocent Darkness could easily be set in the present, and it gives that illusion until a word like dollymop pops up, or someone mentions corsets. If a story is to be set in a historical period, it should give that feeling all the way through, not just at sporadic moments. The steampunk background seemed more gimmicky than helpful to the story to me, so I was disappointed with its execution.

That being said, Suzanne Lazear’s voice is a very readable one, and because of that Innocent Darkness is easy to pick up and read for hours. Readers looking for a quick, fun book will enjoy Innocent Darkness. Noli is a spunky protagonist who is just too much fun to follow around. Skilled at troublemaking, Noli will delight fans of girls who break barriers with pride.

Innocent Darkness also features a love triangle, and luckily it’s one that doesn’t totally involve two guys going caveman and fighting over one lucky gal. Both love interests have their merits—one certainly more than the other—but they don’t push Noli too hard to be theirs. The choice is ultimately Noli’s, which is the way it should be.

If adventures in faeryland are your thing, check out Innocent Darkness. The mythology might not be fresh, but the story is fun and exciting enough to keep you hooked.
Have any of you read it, guys? Don’t hesitate to share your opinion in the comments below!  I’d gladly discuss this book with you personally.

At the moment I am thinking about what to read next, do you have any ideas, guys?
3/5 stars

For those who like: faeries, love triangles

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